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Hey KiLLeR2001, your a pretty good poet.

However i personaly hate rap its a shame they have to degrade the word music with poems on tape. Or as the guy across the hall would say "Poetry with Bass"


Ya his music is generaly even more annoying. Is that you how judge it?

i though of this in like 8-10 min it's crappy though

I tryna escape a situation i cant afford,
i shot someone once because i was just bored,
i killed a man on a monopoly board, just for his money,
i got pissed for losing and mac'd his girl,
after that i sluaghtered his bunny,
I just had to shoot,
it was just so ing cute,
oh no! it's all over the floor,
better pick it up and wipe it all over his door,
painted with blood,
my favorite colour is red, so i just kept it there and it just bled,
i was filed in for a murder case,
because i killed my enemy at his own ing place,
i tried to escape the cuffs in deh car,
but it was just my friends playing a bad joke,
by taking me to a gay bar,
i just went along with it,
killed all them after,
stuffed them down the whole in the nearest crapper,
im not much of a rapper,
but i shure can keep a deal,
when you cant keep it i just choke you till you ing squeal,
then i might cook you and serve you as a ing jail meal,
New York Police Department, please free yayo,
if you don't in 5 seconds i will i will blow down your apartment,
im not scared,
i killed alot of people, i shot cops,
they just tried to run me over but i jumped off a steep hill,
i got shot in my crib,
i thought i was :censored ing dead,

aaaah that ty rap, lol its my first
please laugh at it, it is soo gay

Not that bad for a first rap Void... But it seems you put a lot of commas and newlines where they really don't need to be. See, when I write something I think of how I would say it IRL, then I apply the commas and newlines accordingly to let myself know how I would say it... Good work though, never give up.

lol... i was never smart on placing commas etc, or periods, all that crap...
i just write something and place them in the most needed places

Ok, I wrote up a few more... These ones took a bit longer...

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I'm that killer the devil, notorious menace to society,
If you get on my level, I'll finish you off with some variety,
Like stab you in the neck, till your vein pops through your nose,
Then throw you off the deck, with a cinder block attached to your toes,
And yet nobody knows, what's about to hit 'em until it happens,
Cause disrespecting your hoes, is nothing more than a passion,
So I strip off they clothes, and let them perform orgasmic action,
You see it's nothin too complicated, cause it's for my own satisfaction,
And when I'm through with this , you'll get nothing more than a fraction.

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Just look into these eyes, I'm the living hell of this Earth,
I like watchin' you die, and enjoyin' every bit of your hurt,
Cause it's a line of work, that I like to master into perfection,
me over once, I'll make sure your wife miscarries a C-Section,
No longer will you get an erection, then bush will win the election,
Every one of your fives senses, will then fail to give off detection,
And you'll get fired from work, because it didn't pass state inspection,
When you finally get home, you realise that you're nothin' but an infection,
You'd look into the mirror, but you've already killed your own reflection,
There's no way out of fear, you've gone in every possible direction,
So let this be a lesson, for all the people of small and distant places,
I've done a lot of guessin', and killed way too many innocent faces.

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You see, I can up your life, within' the split of light speed,
Believe me, this razor sharp knife, will slit your life free,
And your wifey, is 3 weeks pregnant with a baby from my seed,
Don't deny me, cause I'm able to snap, then attack, like Ali,
My agility is so intact, that infact, I'll make your mind bleed,
It'll instantly react, nothin' but black is what your eyes see.

They way i read those makes me think of a poem >_<

Nah it looks like some french rap... Which is rap that sucks.

BTW you could maybe consider this as rap anyway (and not poems), since raps don't nessessarely need ":censored:" words everywhere and sexy girls to sound like something people like...

My friend can rap about minivans...

Rap is poetry with a beaat. Take out the beat, you got poetry.
So, very nice poem

thats amazing
WOW. JUST.WOW
WOW

If I didn't hate rap, I'd be impressed.

Cool. Just Cool.

go sen rappers


*Zombie turns into a dj

Dont resurect 2 week old topic dumb