Report, edit, etc...Posted by Legendary(LX) on 2006-05-31 at 00:31:18
Short trailer :/
Maybe you should have a storyline where I capture one of your assistants and use them for target practice, but keep missing.
Maybe you should have a storyline where I capture one of your assistants and use them for target practice, but keep missing.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Moogle on 2006-05-31 at 00:49:31
--; im evil? Really lol. Farewell cruel world, because im gonna leg hump ya all! Including you lil white name illegitimate childs! ya u know whom u r!
Gonna look at trailer now..
Gonna look at trailer now..
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Lyon on 2006-05-31 at 01:30:49
Moogle you are teh 1337 in the Trailer. lol
Crimson..uh...i dunno..
Doomgaze, if you really want in, ask moogle. cause i pretty much do whatever he says, lol.
Crimson..uh...i dunno..
Doomgaze, if you really want in, ask moogle. cause i pretty much do whatever he says, lol.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by DoomGaze on 2006-05-31 at 01:33:43
I thought you were in charge of this map...?
It doesn't really matter whether I'm in the map or not. It's your choice.
It doesn't really matter whether I'm in the map or not. It's your choice.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by empty on 2006-05-31 at 01:52:25
Ah n0 mUs1c WtF Ly0n!? jk, nice trailer.
Introdues the story very well.
Introdues the story very well.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by DoomGaze on 2006-05-31 at 03:18:27
I've learned from last time not to properly review demos, so you're going to have a rather basic critique this time around. And yes, this is a demo, not a trailer.
Well, there were some errors concerning which words were capitalized, and which words weren't. Also, there was this line, I don't remember which one, but the a is not supposed to be part of the word. It's a vague description, but go look around your triggers and you'll find the mistake eventually. The intro was a bit slow, with a lot of lines, but little action. You should spice things up with some random things flying by to add some humour, or maybe something else that I can't think of right now. I'm a bit taken back by the fact that there were no wavs at all, but I'm sure you'll add them by the end of production, so there's little problem in that.
As for the map interest, there's two ways you can go. Either add loads of fancy fireworkds, special effects, and all that jazz and awe the audience, or stun them with an amazing script. Or you could do both. From the looks of the demo thus far, you seem to be relying on rather crude humor so far, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but you won't be able to keep it interesting for long with it. What you need to do is add a wider range of humor, say satirical, parodizing, sarcasm, irony, pathos, and all those other literary devices in order to appeal to a greater audience, and keep things amusing for everyone. Or you could go crazy with Tuxedo Templar-esque trailer effects (great, now he even has his own brand of style imprinted unto the community) and make this an eye candy film instead.
Well, there were some errors concerning which words were capitalized, and which words weren't. Also, there was this line, I don't remember which one, but the a is not supposed to be part of the word. It's a vague description, but go look around your triggers and you'll find the mistake eventually. The intro was a bit slow, with a lot of lines, but little action. You should spice things up with some random things flying by to add some humour, or maybe something else that I can't think of right now. I'm a bit taken back by the fact that there were no wavs at all, but I'm sure you'll add them by the end of production, so there's little problem in that.
As for the map interest, there's two ways you can go. Either add loads of fancy fireworkds, special effects, and all that jazz and awe the audience, or stun them with an amazing script. Or you could do both. From the looks of the demo thus far, you seem to be relying on rather crude humor so far, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but you won't be able to keep it interesting for long with it. What you need to do is add a wider range of humor, say satirical, parodizing, sarcasm, irony, pathos, and all those other literary devices in order to appeal to a greater audience, and keep things amusing for everyone. Or you could go crazy with Tuxedo Templar-esque trailer effects (great, now he even has his own brand of style imprinted unto the community) and make this an eye candy film instead.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Moogle on 2006-05-31 at 03:24:44
QUOTE(Mp)Lyon @ May 31 2006, 04:30 PM)
Moogle you are teh 1337 in the Trailer. lol
Crimson..uh...i dunno..
Doomgaze, if you really want in, ask moogle. cause i pretty much do whatever he says, lol.
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Crimson..uh...i dunno..
Doomgaze, if you really want in, ask moogle. cause i pretty much do whatever he says, lol.
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Huh? not my map, dont need do what i say lol. Yes i saw myself in trailer. GO MY UBER ARMY OF LEG HUMPERS I WILL CRUSH THE PIT ONE DAY AND TAKE OVA THE WORLD OR CHASE LYON!
QUOTE(DoomGaze @ May 31 2006, 04:33 PM)
I thought you were in charge of this map...?
It doesn't really matter whether I'm in the map or not. It's your choice.
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It doesn't really matter whether I'm in the map or not. It's your choice.
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He is in charge, not i.
QUOTE(DoomGaze @ May 31 2006, 06:18 PM)
I've learned from last time not to properly review demos, so you're going to have a rather basic critique this time around. And yes, this is a demo, not a trailer.
Well, there were some errors concerning which words were capitalized, and which words weren't. Also, there was this line, I don't remember which one, but the a is not supposed to be part of the word. It's a vague description, but go look around your triggers and you'll find the mistake eventually. The intro was a bit slow, with a lot of lines, but little action. You should spice things up with some random things flying by to add some humour, or maybe something else that I can't think of right now. I'm a bit taken back by the fact that there were no wavs at all, but I'm sure you'll add them by the end of production, so there's little problem in that.
As for the map interest, there's two ways you can go. Either add loads of fancy fireworkds, special effects, and all that jazz and awe the audience, or stun them with an amazing script. Or you could do both. From the looks of the demo thus far, you seem to be relying on rather crude humor so far, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but you won't be able to keep it interesting for long with it. What you need to do is add a wider range of humor, say satirical, parodizing, sarcasm, irony, pathos, and all those other literary devices in order to appeal to a greater audience, and keep things amusing for everyone. Or you could go crazy with Tuxedo Templar-esque trailer effects (great, now he even has his own brand of style imprinted unto the community) and make this an eye candy film instead.
[right][snapback]496488[/snapback][/right]
Well, there were some errors concerning which words were capitalized, and which words weren't. Also, there was this line, I don't remember which one, but the a is not supposed to be part of the word. It's a vague description, but go look around your triggers and you'll find the mistake eventually. The intro was a bit slow, with a lot of lines, but little action. You should spice things up with some random things flying by to add some humour, or maybe something else that I can't think of right now. I'm a bit taken back by the fact that there were no wavs at all, but I'm sure you'll add them by the end of production, so there's little problem in that.
As for the map interest, there's two ways you can go. Either add loads of fancy fireworkds, special effects, and all that jazz and awe the audience, or stun them with an amazing script. Or you could do both. From the looks of the demo thus far, you seem to be relying on rather crude humor so far, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, but you won't be able to keep it interesting for long with it. What you need to do is add a wider range of humor, say satirical, parodizing, sarcasm, irony, pathos, and all those other literary devices in order to appeal to a greater audience, and keep things amusing for everyone. Or you could go crazy with Tuxedo Templar-esque trailer effects (great, now he even has his own brand of style imprinted unto the community) and make this an eye candy film instead.
[right][snapback]496488[/snapback][/right]
Tru, some of text could be improved along with some other stuff, as DG said add fly bys, birds flying around getting eaten by mutalisk or wraith chasing a mutalisk then flying away becaus 6 mutas chasing him then fly back bacause a scv comes on scene holding something lol
; humour bit dull but could use some spicing up. But overall pretty nice.Report, edit, etc...Posted by Foxboy9x on 2006-05-31 at 05:06:57
Pacman dot = scarab sprites?
I want to cast plague on the photon cannon
lol, then I will consume a civilian...yesss......
I want to cast plague on the photon cannon
lol, then I will consume a civilian...yesss......
Report, edit, etc...Posted by marxel on 2006-05-31 at 05:33:24
oh man... i always wanted to be in those SEN based maps. can't you just make me a secret character that you can only see when you enter black sheep wall 
that's as long as im called marxel lol.
talking to myself:
( and with this secret character thing i will lure lyon to putting me in this map yahahahahaha! LOL. oMG)
that's as long as im called marxel lol. talking to myself:
( and with this secret character thing i will lure lyon to putting me in this map yahahahahaha! LOL. oMG)
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Legendary(LX) on 2006-05-31 at 08:43:49
OMG! STOP TALKING TO YOURSELF!
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Foxboy9x on 2006-05-31 at 12:59:37
lol name a marine marxel and then cloak disable it
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Legendary(LX) on 2006-05-31 at 14:17:06
Lol, maybe if you put marxel in it, I could miss one of you but hit him by accident. >:)
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Dada on 2006-05-31 at 14:23:04
Lyon am I in the Trailer!
I havnt looked at it yet cuz right now I'm in school and a couple a days ago i lost internet and I just got it back today so when I get home I'll dl it right away...
For now tell me if I'm in it...
I havnt looked at it yet cuz right now I'm in school and a couple a days ago i lost internet and I just got it back today so when I get home I'll dl it right away...
For now tell me if I'm in it...
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Lyon on 2006-05-31 at 14:38:20
Sory dada!!! you arent in it lol
Only Moose, Moogle, and me are in it.
ADDITION:
Yeah, i am in charge of this Map.
You really cant tell when im joking? lol
Only Moose, Moogle, and me are in it.
ADDITION:
QUOTE(DoomGaze @ May 31 2006, 01:33 AM)
I thought you were in charge of this map...?
It doesn't really matter whether I'm in the map or not. It's your choice.
[right][snapback]496470[/snapback][/right]
It doesn't really matter whether I'm in the map or not. It's your choice.
[right][snapback]496470[/snapback][/right]
Yeah, i am in charge of this Map.
You really cant tell when im joking? lol
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Cloud on 2006-05-31 at 14:44:15
Its cause your humor suckzorz Lyon!!! you are not 1337 enough!![/scarcasm] 
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Lyon on 2006-05-31 at 14:54:32
i hate you cloud!
IM GONNA TAKE YOU OUT OF THE CAST!!!![/sarcasm] lol
no im kidding. But anyways, im thinking of letting 2 or 4 more ppl Into the cast. having a limit of 20, 22, or 24 Cast members, instead of 18.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Syphon on 2006-05-31 at 15:29:41
Just stick me into the last word in every scene, you know my joke style. If not read my posts. All of them.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Dark_lunatic_K on 2006-05-31 at 16:16:04
The movie wasn't funny at all. You made moose too nice in there too. You should have him continously send me threats through PM (which he really does do). 
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Cloud on 2006-05-31 at 16:21:21
QUOTE(Dark_lunatic_K @ May 31 2006, 08:15 PM)
The movie wasn't funny at all. You made moose too nice in there too. You should have him continously send me threats through PM (which he really does do).
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It is funny, seriously. Who in the hell is afraid of a pit with Moogle in it
the worst that'll happen is he'll tell you about how he owns at making RPGs lol...Report, edit, etc...Posted by Lyon on 2006-05-31 at 17:03:01
lol, Thank you cloud i'll take that as a compliment =)
Ok Syphon, i dont care if you want to be in it or not. Im putting you in the last scene just to mess it up, lol.
Ok Syphon, i dont care if you want to be in it or not. Im putting you in the last scene just to mess it up, lol.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by HorroR on 2006-05-31 at 17:36:43
QUOTE(Foxboy9x @ May 31 2006, 11:59 AM)
lol name a marine marxel and then cloak disable it
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Better idea than Crimson: The good guys are driving a car then the driver (Most likely will be Lyon) accidentally hits marxel and drags the corpse until we stop to a MacDonalds for a Big Mac
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Voyager7456(MM) on 2006-05-31 at 17:37:55
I'm afraid of a pit with Moogle in it... I want to keep my leg's virginity... 
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Xx.Doom.xX on 2006-05-31 at 17:45:33
Lol looks kool
Foxboy gets 2 lines!
Foxboy gets 2 lines! Report, edit, etc...Posted by Zell.Dincht on 2006-05-31 at 17:45:41
Well if theres still room for a cast member add me in. I dont care wat unit I am. Maybe u can make me like a high ranked commander or something but I dont know how 2 to warfare or something. 
Ima check trailer and post back.
Ima check trailer and post back.Report, edit, etc...Posted by EcHo on 2006-05-31 at 17:46:10
I made the trailer *COUGH*
I think MiniMoose2707 is EVIL!
I think MiniMoose2707 is EVIL!