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Thanks, I liked your poems and can see how not using rhymes can also have a good effect, ill try it out today.

*off topic*
That whole nerd / geek thing arised because when I said
"shocko isn't such a loser in real life " I actually meant that almost all map makers hate me and think little of me, but in reality it's far from the truth.

*off topic* Shocko if you were black you would make a nice rapper

*on topic* *drools*

Im white, and a long long time ago I tried to make a rap, oh god it was horrible.

At my nans house, very bored and a desire to write a poem -- im thinking about writing my girlfriend another one, I need to find a start and it will flow from there, with any luck ill have another poem posted by the end of the day.

ADDITION:
Well it's been a while since I wrote another poem but I started one, not as structured as my others and was originally going to be a song, not quite sure yet but here it is:


Only you know what is true
and the truth is what you fear
Your screams are now becoming whispers
so you're the only one that hears
And the marks left on your face
are nothing more then blood stained tears

Damn Shocko I mean Damn thats not bad I dislike you but your poems are alright.

Quite a number of people say my poetry is alright, however I personally know I have a lot (and I mean a lot) of room for improvement.

You have structure, and it comes from the heart. Is there need for improvment?

Yea twitch, Agreed

oooh Shocko! This was nice. Very nice. It all goes so well together. I kinda fit in with that and my ex's drama. Good Job Shocko!

Im a map maker and I dont hate you.

Well back on topic, I like your poems, their better than wat I can write. Which is not a lot. You still up to that band thing.

Yeah but a lot of stuff has happened, and so I am currently bandless.

My first one failed because of drugs, the second one I quit because they were singing about the beauty in life and I wasn't aloud to be express myself at all.

I want to make a band called: Tear away the Tears. The First Tear is tear as in tear a piece of paper, the second is tears as in crying tears.

Was it you doing drugs or the band members?

Steve (my guitarist) was doing drugs so my drummer (oliver) quit, and then eventually Steve got overconsumed in drugs and quit playing guitar all together further meaning he was no longer part of the band.

So the band only consisted of three people ?

At the time, yes.

How many does the band consist now if you still have one. And how many songs did you actually make when you were in the band.

As I previously said, the band no longer exists.

Songs... well, since I was always sober I would always make lyrics and poems so I was always ready for a song, but Steve was always getting high or getting drunk or going to a party with some girl then leaving with the girls sister, so he never really took the time to record. However we did have the guitar for 1 song finished and the lyrics finished and that's when we got the drummer then a week later the drummer left. The drummer stopped playing drums as well now and now plays bass for my friends band (the one I joined then quit a day or two later) They were going to call themselves Clubbed to Death but I didn't like the name and I quit, that and other reasons.

Also, my poems are going to be in my schools yearbook !!

Whoah! That's good news! Hope the people at your school like ur poems as much as we did! Good Luck with that.

I doubt they will, I showed one person and then I became the resident emo of my school

Second poem is by far the best. Shocko, you were right, if you want emotion, read your poems.

That's because they was written when I was depressed or overly happy.

Those are the best moods for humans

tru.dat