Report, edit, etc...Posted by guardien on 2005-09-10 at 23:04:31
Well, here it is, everyone I showed this to said it was great, so i'll see if i get the same response here too...
You Dream Angel
Who is there
In my dreams
Night after night
Day after day
Lovely girl
Only her
Vacation’s my dreams
Enamor I guess this is
Sweet you seem to be
You’ve been in my dreams
Over and time again
Unlocked my dreams
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You
Yeah, it must be you
Only you can move the sky
Unlock the true meaning of life
Appreciate imperfection
Repel any evil
Evaporate tears from a friends face
Believe in your choices
Evade a useless pain
Avoid the unheartly
Unite friends and foes alike
This must be true
In the night sky
Full of bright stars
U are the shooting star
Lovely Tina, only you I can love
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Her
She's like a gust of wind
Blowing through my mind
Like an endless laughter
a heroic battle cry
Like a fish in water
that can't be caught
An unchopable tree
the salt in the oceans
She will always be in my mind
I hope I'm in her’s
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Eyes
In your eyes I see
Happiness and sadness
great and horrible experiences
life and pain
In your face I see
a fading ray of hope
desiring friendship and faith
and something to hold on to
In your hair I see
fiery passion
a thirst for power
a thirst to be helped and treated right
Through your eyes, I see...
You, a beautiful angel spreading her wings
our unborn child
a love that is true to never end
I see a thirst for love
Let me quench that thirst...
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The Moon Girl
From the edge of the light, I watch the darkness
Watching those who have fallen to the depths of their hell
Wanting, waiting, wishing, hoping, praying
That I can find and guide someone, back to the light
Then darkness commences to surround me
But loyal to my origins, I light a candle
Fragile light, I pray it burns through the night
Even so this darkness seems endless, I need the light
And with the final rays of my dying flame, a light appears in the distance
A girl, shining like the moon should shine bright in the sky, ever moving closer and closer
My eyes glued to her, never noticing my last ray fading away
I lose sight of all that is around me, only leaving her for concentration to keep my sanity in this darkness
Her light appears before me, face to face, we gaze into each others eyes
Her eyes are beautiful, but who is she? Is this the end of my life, into the eternal dream?
Or maybe a this is real, nothing more real than the truth in her sad eyes, her life, her dreams, her spirit is bleeding
She falls before me, and before she hits the dirty ground, my arms caught her light body with haste
Her long brown hair, softly waves around my arms
I lay her head gently on my shoulder, my other hand, holding the back of her head, surrounded by her flowing hair
She picks up her knees and kneels before me, her arms wrapping around my body
She starts to cry lightly in my arms, as I let all her emotions pour out of her restless soul
My weakness is shattered by her pain, allowing me to live with reason again
She takes her head away from my shoulder slowly, and smiles, taking my breath away
My smile answers her slowly, and tears still weep from her eyes
My hands move below her eyes, and I wipe her tears away from her gorgeous eyes
Then we both get on our feet, I nod to her, and she nods back,
And holding our small smiles, we turn, and take each others hand, and we take a step forth
And now onward we walk together, hand in hand, through the endless darkness, looking for the bright horizon
Back, looking for somewhere we belong
She is the moon of my endless night.
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Brown Eyed Reflection
The look in her eyes I often see
When she gazes at me,
A rarity, eyes of beauty
Her head turned to me
My breath is taken from me
The surprise I get
From your eyes I’ve met
Just another moment I wish you could tarry
So I can peer into those eyes so pretty
That I could dance away across the room
Jumping around this classroom
I would forget all the mistakes I’ve made
And live my life today
That’s the feeling I get every time
You set gaze in my eyes
Because your important to me
A waste my life would be
Without you
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All of these poems above are copyright to Matthew Commanda.
You Dream Angel
Who is there
In my dreams
Night after night
Day after day
Lovely girl
Only her
Vacation’s my dreams
Enamor I guess this is
Sweet you seem to be
You’ve been in my dreams
Over and time again
Unlocked my dreams
---------------------------------------------
You
Yeah, it must be you
Only you can move the sky
Unlock the true meaning of life
Appreciate imperfection
Repel any evil
Evaporate tears from a friends face
Believe in your choices
Evade a useless pain
Avoid the unheartly
Unite friends and foes alike
This must be true
In the night sky
Full of bright stars
U are the shooting star
Lovely Tina, only you I can love
-------------------------------------------------------
Her
She's like a gust of wind
Blowing through my mind
Like an endless laughter
a heroic battle cry
Like a fish in water
that can't be caught
An unchopable tree
the salt in the oceans
She will always be in my mind
I hope I'm in her’s
-------------------------------------------------------
Eyes
In your eyes I see
Happiness and sadness
great and horrible experiences
life and pain
In your face I see
a fading ray of hope
desiring friendship and faith
and something to hold on to
In your hair I see
fiery passion
a thirst for power
a thirst to be helped and treated right
Through your eyes, I see...
You, a beautiful angel spreading her wings
our unborn child
a love that is true to never end
I see a thirst for love
Let me quench that thirst...
------------------------------------------------------
The Moon Girl
From the edge of the light, I watch the darkness
Watching those who have fallen to the depths of their hell
Wanting, waiting, wishing, hoping, praying
That I can find and guide someone, back to the light
Then darkness commences to surround me
But loyal to my origins, I light a candle
Fragile light, I pray it burns through the night
Even so this darkness seems endless, I need the light
And with the final rays of my dying flame, a light appears in the distance
A girl, shining like the moon should shine bright in the sky, ever moving closer and closer
My eyes glued to her, never noticing my last ray fading away
I lose sight of all that is around me, only leaving her for concentration to keep my sanity in this darkness
Her light appears before me, face to face, we gaze into each others eyes
Her eyes are beautiful, but who is she? Is this the end of my life, into the eternal dream?
Or maybe a this is real, nothing more real than the truth in her sad eyes, her life, her dreams, her spirit is bleeding
She falls before me, and before she hits the dirty ground, my arms caught her light body with haste
Her long brown hair, softly waves around my arms
I lay her head gently on my shoulder, my other hand, holding the back of her head, surrounded by her flowing hair
She picks up her knees and kneels before me, her arms wrapping around my body
She starts to cry lightly in my arms, as I let all her emotions pour out of her restless soul
My weakness is shattered by her pain, allowing me to live with reason again
She takes her head away from my shoulder slowly, and smiles, taking my breath away
My smile answers her slowly, and tears still weep from her eyes
My hands move below her eyes, and I wipe her tears away from her gorgeous eyes
Then we both get on our feet, I nod to her, and she nods back,
And holding our small smiles, we turn, and take each others hand, and we take a step forth
And now onward we walk together, hand in hand, through the endless darkness, looking for the bright horizon
Back, looking for somewhere we belong
She is the moon of my endless night.
-------------------------------------------------------
Brown Eyed Reflection
The look in her eyes I often see
When she gazes at me,
A rarity, eyes of beauty
Her head turned to me
My breath is taken from me
The surprise I get
From your eyes I’ve met
Just another moment I wish you could tarry
So I can peer into those eyes so pretty
That I could dance away across the room
Jumping around this classroom
I would forget all the mistakes I’ve made
And live my life today
That’s the feeling I get every time
You set gaze in my eyes
Because your important to me
A waste my life would be
Without you
-------------------------------------------
All of these poems above are copyright to Matthew Commanda.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by DT_Battlekruser on 2005-09-11 at 00:46:00
"Moon Girl" is an excellent example of what real love is. Good job. You should enter it in a poetry contest 
Report, edit, etc...Posted by notnuclearrabbit on 2005-09-11 at 00:56:43
[center]STOP WRITING ABOUT ME!
Anyways... Those were good, I liked 'em.[/center]
Anyways... Those were good, I liked 'em.[/center]
Report, edit, etc...Posted by guardien on 2005-09-11 at 21:24:31
I find the moon girl was my best work, cause the last line does it all, She is the moon of my endless night. I thought that up while I was passing my papers 
Report, edit, etc...Posted by notnuclearrabbit on 2005-09-11 at 23:27:35
[center]Mind if I ask who these are about, if anyone?[/center]
Report, edit, etc...Posted by guardien on 2005-09-12 at 15:26:32
A few special girls I know, you dream angel was for a girl i saw many a time in dreams, 7, if you wanted to know, by the name of Larissa. She has red hair.
You, Her and brown eyed reflection are for the first girl I liked called Tina. These were the 2nd-4th poems I wrote. She's blond.
Lastly, Eyes and my personal favorite "The moon girl", were for a girl that i truly admired because she's a warrior, not some little coward girl i see everyday. But what kills me, is she has sad, but powerful eyes, they're....nothing short of amazing. And she goes by the name of Kayla. And she's a brunnette.
All the girls I've ever liked/loved, always have their name end with an "a". I't do go well i'f I'd say Matthew & Kayla Commanda. It just dont sound right.
The latest girl I like, Alixandria, but I just call her Alix for short, she ain't beautiful, special, pretty or cute, but there's something so different about her I cant get her out of my mind. It's never happend to me before. I scream into my pillow because i'f I dont see her in awhile, I start to miss her like she died. Its awful, but, she's the only girl i've ever known that I'd die for. Kayla was one step below that.
And Alix is a brunette
I have a few more, a few on Alix, one on Tina, and another about Kayla, so i'll post them soon...
You, Her and brown eyed reflection are for the first girl I liked called Tina. These were the 2nd-4th poems I wrote. She's blond.
Lastly, Eyes and my personal favorite "The moon girl", were for a girl that i truly admired because she's a warrior, not some little coward girl i see everyday. But what kills me, is she has sad, but powerful eyes, they're....nothing short of amazing. And she goes by the name of Kayla. And she's a brunnette.
All the girls I've ever liked/loved, always have their name end with an "a". I't do go well i'f I'd say Matthew & Kayla Commanda. It just dont sound right.
The latest girl I like, Alixandria, but I just call her Alix for short, she ain't beautiful, special, pretty or cute, but there's something so different about her I cant get her out of my mind. It's never happend to me before. I scream into my pillow because i'f I dont see her in awhile, I start to miss her like she died. Its awful, but, she's the only girl i've ever known that I'd die for. Kayla was one step below that.
And Alix is a brunette
I have a few more, a few on Alix, one on Tina, and another about Kayla, so i'll post them soon...