Report, edit, etc...Posted by Forsaken on 2005-11-15 at 09:58:11
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Another Day
All in all it's just another day
As I slowly watch you fade away
The look upon your eyes
Was just a mere disguise
I thought I once knew you
Turns out reality was indeed due
I fell in love with a fallacy
Something no one else can ever see
I entrusted you with my love
Even when I acted tough
All I gave was shoved away
You walked out my lfe on that day
I came bearing roses and a card
I waited two hours in your front yard
Only to be thought of as inferior
And rip up my interior
I look at your picture one last time
Knowing that you were once mine
I look into your soul
Seeing the devil that you just love to hold
My dreams of us have turned awry
I drew X's through your eyes
All in it's just another day
As I slowly watch you fade away
Picture by: Mike Bohatch
American Soldier
I am the American Soldier
I live in this hell as I grow older
Many moons have come and gone
Everything about this war, is cruel and wrong
I sit and wait for my time to fight
I don't even know what is just, and right
I fight for one man's greed
He who cares for his own needs
Children dying, people crying
Why must I continue fighting?
People suffering from the pain
There is nothing more to gain
My innocence has died in this war
I want to no longer see this blood and gore
I am the American Soldier
Why won't this flame just grow cold, and smolder?
Picture By: Mike Bohatch[/center]
Another Day
All in all it's just another day
As I slowly watch you fade away
The look upon your eyes
Was just a mere disguise
I thought I once knew you
Turns out reality was indeed due
I fell in love with a fallacy
Something no one else can ever see
I entrusted you with my love
Even when I acted tough
All I gave was shoved away
You walked out my lfe on that day
I came bearing roses and a card
I waited two hours in your front yard
Only to be thought of as inferior
And rip up my interior
I look at your picture one last time
Knowing that you were once mine
I look into your soul
Seeing the devil that you just love to hold
My dreams of us have turned awry
I drew X's through your eyes
All in it's just another day
As I slowly watch you fade away
Picture by: Mike Bohatch
American Soldier
I am the American Soldier
I live in this hell as I grow older
Many moons have come and gone
Everything about this war, is cruel and wrong
I sit and wait for my time to fight
I don't even know what is just, and right
I fight for one man's greed
He who cares for his own needs
Children dying, people crying
Why must I continue fighting?
People suffering from the pain
There is nothing more to gain
My innocence has died in this war
I want to no longer see this blood and gore
I am the American Soldier
Why won't this flame just grow cold, and smolder?
Picture By: Mike Bohatch[/center]
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Felagund on 2005-11-15 at 11:45:51
I like the first more, but probably because it's more relatable.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Deathawk on 2005-11-15 at 13:00:00
Yeah, I like the first one, although I have trouble relating to it, I still like the rhymes 
The second one is good too..
Who's that guy who drew the pictures, is he you?
"Mike Bohatch"
The second one is good too..
Who's that guy who drew the pictures, is he you?
"Mike Bohatch"
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Forsaken on 2005-11-15 at 17:26:01
Thanks for the responses...
And no, I did not make the pictures.
Otherwise I wouldn't have given "Mike" credit.
And no, I did not make the pictures.
Otherwise I wouldn't have given "Mike" credit.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by notnuclearrabbit on 2005-11-16 at 03:56:42
[center]First one > Other one.
Good rhymes.[/center]
Good rhymes.[/center]
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Zombie on 2005-11-20 at 23:15:34
9/10 man. im so sad now thanks
Report, edit, etc...Posted by fm47 on 2005-12-01 at 02:31:04
I liked the first one a lot... not only was it more relatable, but also the rhythm of it is clean and crisp, each one very well put. The ways the words and their syllables were placed were really nice- I'd always have problems there -_-
Anyway, gj gj
Anyway, gj gj