Report, edit, etc...Posted by Screwed on 2006-03-14 at 11:15:57
I told myself that I'd never touch
but admiration
is too much
I told myself that I can live without
the pleasure
but my heart starts to pound unrhythmically like a flapping trout
I told myself a little bit of you wouldn't hurt
I'd just come and leave without reason like the wind
But something draws me back to flirt
I told myself I can get over you
I thought I could
but not withdrawing a part of me is true
I'm addicted to you.
They all told me it was wrong.
- Screwed
but admiration
is too much
I told myself that I can live without
the pleasure
but my heart starts to pound unrhythmically like a flapping trout
I told myself a little bit of you wouldn't hurt
I'd just come and leave without reason like the wind
But something draws me back to flirt
I told myself I can get over you
I thought I could
but not withdrawing a part of me is true
I'm addicted to you.
They all told me it was wrong.
- Screwed
Report, edit, etc...Posted by MyStIcAl-MySt on 2006-03-14 at 14:03:43
Interesting poem you have written there. I myself do not really rate other people's writing, but I'll say that I like the poem.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Screwed on 2006-03-14 at 22:38:58
The poem itself is a metaphor.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Mp)Blu on 2006-03-15 at 17:53:58
Interesting poem. Great work. 
Report, edit, etc...Posted by (SEN)Dante50 on 2006-03-17 at 01:08:42
I have some of those poem books, and I nearly burned it after I read that. It made a subtle stance with drugs, but still had a great beat to it. One of the greatest poems that I have ever read
Report, edit, etc...Posted by fm47 on 2006-03-21 at 02:24:30
Rofl screwed, maybe I should read your name before wondering what 'Screwed' meant. Thought it was just an indicator of the poem is left unifinished or given up upon >_<
I liked... rather, enjoyed it
I sure would like to know what happens next though >_<!
Good job
I liked... rather, enjoyed it
I sure would like to know what happens next though >_<!Good job
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Screwed on 2006-03-21 at 04:52:00
QUOTE(Mp)Blu @ Mar 16 2006, 11:53 AM)
Interesting poem. Great work.
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Hey thanks.
QUOTE(Dante50 @ Mar 17 2006, 07:08 PM)
I have some of those poem books, and I nearly burned it after I read that. It made a subtle stance with drugs, but still had a great beat to it. One of the greatest poems that I have ever read
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Haha, I'm flattered - but in the end everyone has their own style which makes each poem at its own best.
QUOTE(fm47 @ Mar 21 2006, 08:24 PM)
Rofl screwed, maybe I should read your name before wondering what 'Screwed' meant. Thought it was just an indicator of the poem is left unifinished or given up upon >_<
I liked... rather, enjoyed it I sure would like to know what happens next though >_<!
Good job
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I liked... rather, enjoyed it
I sure would like to know what happens next though >_<!Good job
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Haha yeah. When you asked what the "Screwed" meant in that other thread I pondered on what you meant for a while lol.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by fm47 on 2006-03-21 at 13:07:04
ahahaha XD
Has anyone else noticed? This literature section seems to be slightly more lively these days
Has anyone else noticed? This literature section seems to be slightly more lively these days