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Report, edit, etc...Posted by Screwed on 2006-03-18 at 18:52:05
Plucking the strings
Notes circulate the walls
Echoing endlessly

Playing again
The Melody rises and falls
The notes live in harmony

But the fingers slip
Sliding past the metallic chord into the air
But with such grace redeems itself

With the deceived hidden imperfection

Crowd applauds
Admiring an outward dillusion

The sound ain't right
There is a missing note
Without it the chord is never complete

--Screwed
Report, edit, etc...Posted by fm47 on 2006-03-21 at 02:07:00
It's nice, but either it's just me, but maybe it could sound more rhythmic
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Screwed on 2006-03-21 at 04:47:04
Hmm I guess. This is one of my poems that doesn't really rhyme so I guess I was trying to achieve something more than just a rhyme skeme on the outside.
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