Report, edit, etc...Posted by Rabid_Wolf_101 on 2006-05-19 at 20:05:30
"Launch the Derete within the next hour!" Admiral Yuwo yelled in his sharp booming voice through the intercom system. "Yes sir!" The computer operators yelled and began working on the Launching System on the Mar Sara Airbase.
-30 Minutes Later-
"Engines ready, thrusters engaged, hatches closed, ready for liftoff, over." Captain Furion said from the Derete. The jets rocketed off the platform as the gigantic orbital command ship spun off the starport and headed for high orbit. Wraiths flew around the Derete as it slowly gained altitude, protecting it from Devourers and Scourges that may try to destroy it. "50,000 feet gained, Yuwo. Over." Furion said in the intercom back to the main base. "Roger that, 562nd squadron, pull back to the base." Yuwo said into the radio. "Roger." The wraith squadron leader said, and they all pulled off the Derete's defensive positions. The Derete finally reached high orbit and engaged its thrusters, sending it at a low speed of 30 miles per second. "Auto drive engaged. Radar alarm system activated." A computer operator said to captain Furion. "Excellent, let the computer guide the ship to Tarsonis while we wait, dismissed!" Furion yelled and everyone left their seat into the back centers of the gigantic command ship, all except Furion that is.
-Two Hours Later-
"Approaching 1/8th point of the Tarsonis/Mar-Sara boundary." The computer voice said over the intercom. "Eh, I can't wait to get home and see my wife" A marine said to another marine as Furion walked past. "Yeah, me too, 'cept i have two kids... and..." The voice faded away as Furion walked through the Steel doors into the command capsule. "WARNING: Protossian ship in idle position, evade!" The computer yelled over the intercom. "SH*T!" Furion yelled as he took the controls, moments later his crew rushing in to take their position. It was too late. The battlecruiser impaled the Arbiter in the side, making its warp drive fly out and explode, making a wormhole that began sucking the Derete in. It was over in moments. The Derete spun, its boosters not helping it escape the high pull of the warp hole, and the wormhole closed over the Derete, making it warp to an unknown sector of space.
-10 Minutes Later-
The Derete spun out of the other end of the warp hole, hitting asteroids and getting some damage on the outer hull. "Mar Sara Base! Can you read me? Please pick up! We have been warped to an unknown sector of space!" Furion yelled into the radio, but there was nothing but static. "Captain Furion, we've picked up a planet on radar, only about 70000 miles away! Should we land?" The radar operator asked.
"Land, but engage weapon systems, no telling who's or what's planet that is." Furion commanded. "Yes sir!" And the pilot set the ship on a direct course for the uncharted planet.
The flying platform slowly disengaged thrusters and descended into the turbulent atmosphere, Yamato cannon charged and ready to fire. The ghost soldiers on board had special sniper weapons that can call in carpet bombings from the Battlecruiser's docked wraiths. All was going well on the ship until they reached 500 Altitude.
"What is THAT?!" a pilot asked, half yelling, and pointed out the front window. Furion looked out to see a huge armada of strange ships spiraling towards the ship. The ship shook as a small speed fighter flew 20 feet in front of the Derete and destroyed the ATA guns on the sides of the cockpit. Furion saw the fighter up close, it had a small sphereical main body with 3 spinning claws on the back, and on the front 4 Pointed spikes came out, all with an energy beam forming a blue ball in the center. The cockpit was on the spherical ball and it was black so you could not see the pilot.
These were the most plentiful ships in the armada. Then came the 'Nightmare' as some marines called it after the event. A gigantic ship 50X as large as the Derete began hovering right over the ship. This ship has Yamato cannons lining the edge and a cannon in the center. The cannon in the center was the shape of a spike, but when it charged up, a purple light emmited from the spike and the spike expanded into 4 golden flaps. The actual ship was the shape of a Cigar and on the back there were five hangar doors, probably for Paratroopers, Para-tanks, Fighters, Bombers, and Missiles/Bombs.
The laser slammed onto the Derete's left wing making it begin sinking faster then it should. In a few minutes, the Derete had crashed, leaving nothing but the body of a battlecruiser and two wings broken into about 78 parts total. The weapon systems were totally useless now, but the hangar doors still worked. "What should we do?" The Tactical Officer, Hiriam, asked. "Send troops out and fortify the Derete with the 20 siege tanks we have." Furion answered.
The dented doors opened and armored personell carriers poured out of the side along with jeeps and buggys. Ghosts climbed to the hilltops and covered the marines marching into the unknown world to find the strange attackers. The marines shot every one and a while into the trees to hold the attackers if they were still there, until the front group spotted a long slender silver tower in the distance, on the top there was an armored glass orb with Strange blue buildings around the edges and another orb in the center, inside the center orb was a wormhole with turrets around it to protect from any invaders. This tower was like nothing the marines had ever seen, but one marine had seen it in a dream on Mar Sara. This marines name was Jaco Jumaney, but people called him JJ for short. This marine was a Corporal and was under command of Staff Sergeant Gry Austin, the marine who was in orbit of char when Grantrithor crashed his carrier into the vile overmind. All the marines in his group looked up to him, except Jaco.
Jaco broke from the group with orders to check out the Silver Tower and find out what it was, but nothing could prepare him for what he saw next. Jaco heard a sharp peircing yell and the sound of claws ripping through flesh and bone and saw through a small clearing that every one of his team members were dead. Gry had been cut in half, one man had the top half of his head chopped off, one man had a gaping hole cut into his arm, and one man had his helmet on, but the blood blurred the visor and he wasnt moving. Jaco immediately whipped out his gauss rifle discovering that the ammo clip was empty, and then he pulled out his Colt Magnum pistol and slowly walked up the steeper part of the mountain. Jaco got to the top and dug a foxhole and tried to signal for help, but he couldnt so he dug deeper, covered the top with a camo blanket, and rested, thinking of what was on the planet and if he would die or not. He then went to sleep.
-Morning: 600 hours-
Jaco awoke to the unpleasent sound of a gun cock and immediately grabbed his Colt Magnum again and fired through the blanket. "What the hell!?" he heard a low voice say. Jaco kicked off the camo blanket and within seconds had the man on the ground with a pistol to his head. "Get the hell off me, Corporal!" The man yelled. "And who might you be- oh jeez. Sorry, Captain Furion!" Jaco got up and looked at Furion, in a ghost battlesuit. "Sir, why are you on the battlefield?" Jaco asked. "Well im your superior, and im not a coward. In other words i dont stay behind on a moldy ship while you get all the fun." Furion replied. Jaco felt like he had been dipped in tar and feathers. "Sorry for jumping you sir, i thought you were one of the things that killed my platoon." Jaco apologized. "Your whole platoon?" "Yes, sir, and all the siege tanks in it were blown up as well.
-30 Minutes Later-
"Engines ready, thrusters engaged, hatches closed, ready for liftoff, over." Captain Furion said from the Derete. The jets rocketed off the platform as the gigantic orbital command ship spun off the starport and headed for high orbit. Wraiths flew around the Derete as it slowly gained altitude, protecting it from Devourers and Scourges that may try to destroy it. "50,000 feet gained, Yuwo. Over." Furion said in the intercom back to the main base. "Roger that, 562nd squadron, pull back to the base." Yuwo said into the radio. "Roger." The wraith squadron leader said, and they all pulled off the Derete's defensive positions. The Derete finally reached high orbit and engaged its thrusters, sending it at a low speed of 30 miles per second. "Auto drive engaged. Radar alarm system activated." A computer operator said to captain Furion. "Excellent, let the computer guide the ship to Tarsonis while we wait, dismissed!" Furion yelled and everyone left their seat into the back centers of the gigantic command ship, all except Furion that is.
-Two Hours Later-
"Approaching 1/8th point of the Tarsonis/Mar-Sara boundary." The computer voice said over the intercom. "Eh, I can't wait to get home and see my wife" A marine said to another marine as Furion walked past. "Yeah, me too, 'cept i have two kids... and..." The voice faded away as Furion walked through the Steel doors into the command capsule. "WARNING: Protossian ship in idle position, evade!" The computer yelled over the intercom. "SH*T!" Furion yelled as he took the controls, moments later his crew rushing in to take their position. It was too late. The battlecruiser impaled the Arbiter in the side, making its warp drive fly out and explode, making a wormhole that began sucking the Derete in. It was over in moments. The Derete spun, its boosters not helping it escape the high pull of the warp hole, and the wormhole closed over the Derete, making it warp to an unknown sector of space.
-10 Minutes Later-
The Derete spun out of the other end of the warp hole, hitting asteroids and getting some damage on the outer hull. "Mar Sara Base! Can you read me? Please pick up! We have been warped to an unknown sector of space!" Furion yelled into the radio, but there was nothing but static. "Captain Furion, we've picked up a planet on radar, only about 70000 miles away! Should we land?" The radar operator asked.
"Land, but engage weapon systems, no telling who's or what's planet that is." Furion commanded. "Yes sir!" And the pilot set the ship on a direct course for the uncharted planet.
The flying platform slowly disengaged thrusters and descended into the turbulent atmosphere, Yamato cannon charged and ready to fire. The ghost soldiers on board had special sniper weapons that can call in carpet bombings from the Battlecruiser's docked wraiths. All was going well on the ship until they reached 500 Altitude.
"What is THAT?!" a pilot asked, half yelling, and pointed out the front window. Furion looked out to see a huge armada of strange ships spiraling towards the ship. The ship shook as a small speed fighter flew 20 feet in front of the Derete and destroyed the ATA guns on the sides of the cockpit. Furion saw the fighter up close, it had a small sphereical main body with 3 spinning claws on the back, and on the front 4 Pointed spikes came out, all with an energy beam forming a blue ball in the center. The cockpit was on the spherical ball and it was black so you could not see the pilot.
These were the most plentiful ships in the armada. Then came the 'Nightmare' as some marines called it after the event. A gigantic ship 50X as large as the Derete began hovering right over the ship. This ship has Yamato cannons lining the edge and a cannon in the center. The cannon in the center was the shape of a spike, but when it charged up, a purple light emmited from the spike and the spike expanded into 4 golden flaps. The actual ship was the shape of a Cigar and on the back there were five hangar doors, probably for Paratroopers, Para-tanks, Fighters, Bombers, and Missiles/Bombs.
The laser slammed onto the Derete's left wing making it begin sinking faster then it should. In a few minutes, the Derete had crashed, leaving nothing but the body of a battlecruiser and two wings broken into about 78 parts total. The weapon systems were totally useless now, but the hangar doors still worked. "What should we do?" The Tactical Officer, Hiriam, asked. "Send troops out and fortify the Derete with the 20 siege tanks we have." Furion answered.
The dented doors opened and armored personell carriers poured out of the side along with jeeps and buggys. Ghosts climbed to the hilltops and covered the marines marching into the unknown world to find the strange attackers. The marines shot every one and a while into the trees to hold the attackers if they were still there, until the front group spotted a long slender silver tower in the distance, on the top there was an armored glass orb with Strange blue buildings around the edges and another orb in the center, inside the center orb was a wormhole with turrets around it to protect from any invaders. This tower was like nothing the marines had ever seen, but one marine had seen it in a dream on Mar Sara. This marines name was Jaco Jumaney, but people called him JJ for short. This marine was a Corporal and was under command of Staff Sergeant Gry Austin, the marine who was in orbit of char when Grantrithor crashed his carrier into the vile overmind. All the marines in his group looked up to him, except Jaco.
Jaco broke from the group with orders to check out the Silver Tower and find out what it was, but nothing could prepare him for what he saw next. Jaco heard a sharp peircing yell and the sound of claws ripping through flesh and bone and saw through a small clearing that every one of his team members were dead. Gry had been cut in half, one man had the top half of his head chopped off, one man had a gaping hole cut into his arm, and one man had his helmet on, but the blood blurred the visor and he wasnt moving. Jaco immediately whipped out his gauss rifle discovering that the ammo clip was empty, and then he pulled out his Colt Magnum pistol and slowly walked up the steeper part of the mountain. Jaco got to the top and dug a foxhole and tried to signal for help, but he couldnt so he dug deeper, covered the top with a camo blanket, and rested, thinking of what was on the planet and if he would die or not. He then went to sleep.
-Morning: 600 hours-
Jaco awoke to the unpleasent sound of a gun cock and immediately grabbed his Colt Magnum again and fired through the blanket. "What the hell!?" he heard a low voice say. Jaco kicked off the camo blanket and within seconds had the man on the ground with a pistol to his head. "Get the hell off me, Corporal!" The man yelled. "And who might you be- oh jeez. Sorry, Captain Furion!" Jaco got up and looked at Furion, in a ghost battlesuit. "Sir, why are you on the battlefield?" Jaco asked. "Well im your superior, and im not a coward. In other words i dont stay behind on a moldy ship while you get all the fun." Furion replied. Jaco felt like he had been dipped in tar and feathers. "Sorry for jumping you sir, i thought you were one of the things that killed my platoon." Jaco apologized. "Your whole platoon?" "Yes, sir, and all the siege tanks in it were blown up as well.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by A_of_s_t on 2006-05-25 at 23:16:58
It went by really quick, and, what the hell are those things? Is there a second part, or is this it?
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Rabid_Wolf_101 on 2006-06-11 at 17:52:50
Ay theres a second part, im making my chapters longer and breaking them into paragraphs. I dont really care about grammar on the computer, and i know it has tons of mistakes, but im doing what i can. And last, those things are a surprise! XD
Report, edit, etc...Posted by fm47 on 2006-06-11 at 23:04:51
Don't let being on the computer change who you are, let it reflect who you are instead.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Staredit.Net Essence on 2006-06-22 at 16:26:09
Kinda like my first story a while back 
. You kept skipping time frames, and had no paragraphing, unless the skip of the time frames were the paragraph line brakes O.O'
ADDITION:
Err, scratch that.
. You kept skipping time frames, and had no paragraphing, unless the skip of the time frames were the paragraph line brakes O.O'ADDITION:
Err, scratch that.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Rabid_Wolf_101 on 2006-07-05 at 13:41:18
yeah it sucks i know lol i rarely log now, ima change that, ill edit the story later,