Report, edit, etc...Posted by Ninebreaker on 2006-06-14 at 00:06:52
You'll Never Know
You will never know,
How ugly I feel inside.
To just sit here one day,
And lay down and cry.
When some people call me mean names,
It seems like I don't care.
But really,
The feelings of hurt are always there.
People say that I am not ugly,
And that I am wrong.
But it's hard to agree,
After so long.
You will never know the feelings,
That have been here for years.
These feelings,
That have caused most of my tears.
You will never know the feeling,
Of not being loved.
To sit there and cry,
To be yelled at and shoved.
I want you,
To just be there for me.
Because this will take a while,
For me to be free.
To be free from the feeling inside of me,
The feeling of being ugly.
I know you will never know,
But understand I won't let it show.
Beneath my smiles, laughter and cheers,
There is a person inside that fears.
Of being lonely and not having anybody.
A Dream
A dream of love, reality coming in behind,
As I close my eyes, the vision dies,
As I bid my last farewell to mankind...
In my Dreams
In my dreams I see you
I awake so alone...
In my dreams I can see you
I can tell you how I feel...
In my dreams I can hold you
And it feels so real...
In my dreams
It wasn't as it seems
Just a few poems
You will never know,
How ugly I feel inside.
To just sit here one day,
And lay down and cry.
When some people call me mean names,
It seems like I don't care.
But really,
The feelings of hurt are always there.
People say that I am not ugly,
And that I am wrong.
But it's hard to agree,
After so long.
You will never know the feelings,
That have been here for years.
These feelings,
That have caused most of my tears.
You will never know the feeling,
Of not being loved.
To sit there and cry,
To be yelled at and shoved.
I want you,
To just be there for me.
Because this will take a while,
For me to be free.
To be free from the feeling inside of me,
The feeling of being ugly.
I know you will never know,
But understand I won't let it show.
Beneath my smiles, laughter and cheers,
There is a person inside that fears.
Of being lonely and not having anybody.
A Dream
A dream of love, reality coming in behind,
As I close my eyes, the vision dies,
As I bid my last farewell to mankind...
In my Dreams
In my dreams I see you
I awake so alone...
In my dreams I can see you
I can tell you how I feel...
In my dreams I can hold you
And it feels so real...
In my dreams
It wasn't as it seems
Just a few poems
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Kellodood on 2006-06-14 at 14:02:18
I don't like freeform that much, but they are pretty good.
Keep up the good work
Keep up the good work
Report, edit, etc...Posted by fm47 on 2006-06-15 at 03:00:10
I liked the free-form, actually. I'm not too fond of them because i can hardly catch the rhythm in them, but yours did a good job in the most part. Every now and then it seemed like you had an intentional rétard (i dont know if that can be used to describe literature, I just know it can for music) here and about. I liked them. Keep it up.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Ninebreaker on 2006-06-15 at 23:51:33
Thanks for the comments. I usually only write when i get some inspiration, otherwise i get lost.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by RedNara on 2006-06-16 at 16:02:51
Dude i like them a lot the first one was better than the second one.
nice poem
and yea maybe work on the freestyle just a little more... it feels like a bumpy road at times lol..
nice poem
and yea maybe work on the freestyle just a little more... it feels like a bumpy road at times lol..Report, edit, etc...Posted by Staredit.Net Essence on 2006-06-22 at 16:21:27
Once again, uber-tacular Poem! 