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Holy's Light...
So bright...
So dazzling...
Is this..Holy's light?

The planet's core...
Bursting out...
Meteor is coming...
Save us, before it's too late...

The smell is sweet...
The music is beautiful...
But the light is blind...
And I am too...(err..yeah..)

The light will guide us...
Destroy meteor...
Using the life stream...

Is this Holy's Light?
Bursting out of the Planet's core?

My first and only crappy poem...I wish I could've done better :\

Actually, it wasn't too bad. Though you overly used "...", it is common amongst beginners. Blank those out and it was actually quite rhythmic. I liked the third verse, but the forth was slightly off. Anyhow, it wasn't as bad as you think it is, just keep it writing and you'll become better. Also, it seems like you like--love--Final Fantasy, as do I, but give in a few shots of writing of a few things in your perspective. Even through Final Fantasy, you can place yourself in the concept of the plots.

Good luck.

I dont really understand what its about, and how a meteor and holy's light tie together, but in all it was good.

I agree, but its his first poem...

Scarf the "..." in almost every line and you've got a poem.

ADDITION:



Btw it is from FF7, let me explain abit.

Meteor is summoned from a materia in FF7 called "Black Materia." Now unfortunately this was a key item and was unusable. Okey well Sephiroth gets ahold of it(if you wanna know how and crap play the game yourself.) and summons it. But not before Aeris summons Holy(The counter of Meteor) with her "White Materia." (And if you notice theres the big bad rasicim in there to, Black being "bad" and white being "good") Well Holy gets blocked by Sephiroth(Don't ask.) and Cloud goes down says like 1 of that poems lines and then Sephiroth appears. Cloud kills Sephiroth, Holy and meteor fight, Meteor basically wins cuz it s too close to the planet for holy to be effective, then the lifestream comes and helps holy, Meteor gets owned the worlds saved.

Don't ask any questions about this, if you want answers play the actual game..

It has nothing to do with the colors white and black really. The reason black is bad, is because black is a dark color, and dark colors usually represent the bad side. And vice versa.

And i think clouds explanation was probably a little bit confusing for those who havent played it. So ill try to explain it a little better.

Black Materia = Magic that summons meteor to destroy earth.
Holy = Magic to stop meteor.
Lifestream = River of Spirit Energy (You go there when you die)

The bad guy gets ahold of the black materia. He uses it to summon meteor. The world goes into a crisis because everybody knows they are going to die in a few days. But before the meteor hits, The good guys kill the bad guy and activate holy to stop meteor. Holy was called to late, and meteor begins to destroy part of earth. Lifestream comes to help holy stop meteor, and they successfully stop meteor.

Cloud, I couldn't resist from being irritated from your post right there. To begin with, learn how to spell. Secondly, if you're going to explain something, do it clean and simple. All the "this and that crap happening and this and that" I don't think anyone's getting it more than the poem itself.

Another thing: racism? I don't care what color you are, but get over it. Since thousands of years ago, darker colors were commonly associated with darker things because for a period of time, when Man didn't have light by grant, they worked the day and sleep when the sun goes down. And towards the instinctive perspective, when it is "dark" or what some would describe the darkness with the color "black", our visual sense are dulled and hearing usually raises. We begin to hear things we normally don't pay attention to and due to its sudden intrusion into our daily lives, it generates fear.
Just because America had its history with black slaves doesn't mean everytime someone describe something bad with "black" or "dark" is racism. It's ignorant and arrogant. There are political terms, most people (including the "Black" people) just tend to use easier or "fad" terms.

There is so much more I could write on that because of how much it got on my nerves, but I'll let you figure the rest out yourself. Good luck.