Report, edit, etc...Posted by Screwed on 2006-07-11 at 21:08:10
[center]Hungry For Love
12/07/06
You'll punch me in the eye
And my skin will be a bruised banana
With my eyes leaking like a squashed grape
I will tear my heart out
Attack and stab it
Cut it and slice it
Like steak
And feed it to your hungry desires
Tears drenched my remaining sorrows
Like the leftover pasta from last night
Yet I still try to swallow the baked coldness
--Screwed[/center]
12/07/06
You'll punch me in the eye
And my skin will be a bruised banana
With my eyes leaking like a squashed grape
I will tear my heart out
Attack and stab it
Cut it and slice it
Like steak
And feed it to your hungry desires
Tears drenched my remaining sorrows
Like the leftover pasta from last night
Yet I still try to swallow the baked coldness
--Screwed[/center]
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Mini Moose 2707 on 2006-07-13 at 23:55:49
Personally, the imagery doesn't work for me. It seems overused and like a steak.... overdone. 
Report, edit, etc...Posted by fm47 on 2006-07-18 at 02:37:33
Somewhat disturbing thinking about slice n' dicing a heart then eating it >_<
I'm 50/50 on it.
My mind is too blank to give an acutual critique, so I just gave that.
I'm 50/50 on it.
My mind is too blank to give an acutual critique, so I just gave that.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Falcon_A on 2006-07-19 at 01:54:01
Yea, I actually like the meaning
Jus...too much food. Lol. ;P
Jus...too much food. Lol. ;P