Report, edit, etc...Posted by Oo.Insane.oO on 2006-09-12 at 21:46:56
With everyday that passes another one begins
With everyday I wonder cant stop for a second to think
I try to live life one day at a time but I cant do it
Because I wonder about the next day and the days ahead
With everyday I waste another one to choose my route
With every choice I make another one opens up
Why is it so hard to just do your best...
With everyday that passes I cant stop to wonder why
How the next one will be and all I can do is try
Not the best but ehh rate it anyway :/
With everyday I wonder cant stop for a second to think
I try to live life one day at a time but I cant do it
Because I wonder about the next day and the days ahead
With everyday I waste another one to choose my route
With every choice I make another one opens up
Why is it so hard to just do your best...
With everyday that passes I cant stop to wonder why
How the next one will be and all I can do is try
Not the best but ehh rate it anyway :/
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Eskimo Bob on 2006-09-18 at 23:41:03
I dont really like it that much, not enough ryhming, but you'll get better, 3/5
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Mp)Blu on 2006-09-19 at 11:17:40
I say...2.5/5
keep the poems coming though
keep the poems coming though
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Oo.Insane.oO on 2006-09-21 at 14:50:43
QUOTE(DE_Trav @ Sep 18 2006, 10:40 PM)
I dont really like it that much, not enough ryhming, but you'll get better, 3/5
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If you look back a little to a topic called "Insanes writings" or something my poems all used to rhyme on every line and people didnt like it...I try and not rhyme at all and people still dont like it
