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Hi everyone. I write poems sometimes, most of the time I write then in dutch but some I wrote in english because I like the language, others I just translated from dutch to englisch.
Here are some of my works:

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Illusion

Truly, the illusion
is with all its lies
more beautiful
then the truth
can ever be.

Let me live,
die in illusion.

Let my death
live in illusion.


This one I wrote today in a few minutes, then I thought about 8 ours if I should add , or . at some places . I wrote this in dutch and just translated it into english but in dutch it's much better.

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Of love and despair

So pure and graceful
but still so simple
letters, the bearers
of love and luck.

Now they bring my errand
of love and despair,
they can't encompass it
but it's my last recourse.

My hands are trembling
from despair, not the cold,
in solitude I write:
'I love you'.

There isn't much left
but it's still alive,
I've lost my heart
and the thief, that's you.


This was original written in dutch but I translated this one too. I really like it in dutch but here it's not that good since because the metrum and rhyme are completely different.

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Here two parts of some writings, the rest of the poem is crap so I'll just post this .

My life is permeated with silence,
only the peals of my cry's remain.

I locked my heart with a zeal.
I don't have anyone who cares
that's atleast how I feel.

And the other:

Is there nobody out there,
who wants to help me.
Someone with whom I can share
my feelings of despair.

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Normally I only post my poems on an dutch forum with other writers but I whould like to know what other people who don't read poems often (that's what I presume) think about them.
One last thing, my english can be a little bad sometimes. I'm just an 15 year old guy from an non-english country and I really suck at languages. So don't be too hard plz .

Ow and the really really last thing; Yes I always write 'not so happy'-poems, it kinda reflects my life life sucks.

It cant be too bad..?

Nice poems I'm probly not the best to critique poems but they were good !!

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Heres one of my poems!!

[center]ENGLISH CLASS

I love to go to English Class
To learn about grammar.
I just can’t wait,
To go to sleep at eight.

When I wake up
I’m in for a treat.
Little Bo Peep,
Is out there with her sheep.

At eight forty-five
The big truck comes out.
Then we watch the seagulls,
Fight over rotten bagels.

Watching Ferris Buelers day off
Is the last thing we do.
It shows that we only,
Have two seconds to get away from here swiftly.

Oh, NO
Left too early.
Now I gotta wait,
And I’m gunna be late!
[/center]

Well, you probly would of had to been in my english class.... So you probly wont get any of it. Oh well it was a project to write a poem in that class !!

ADDITION:
When it sais little bo peep is out their with the sheep its because across the street on the side of the school the house has sheeps???

ADDITION:
when it sais the big truck comes out it means the trash truck picking up the garbage and one time their was a couple seagulls out their!!?

yeh.. somehow i think deadalus are just a teency bit better than yours n2o....

*cough*

yeh but nice poems deadalus!

overall id give your *writing* skill about an 8/10

n20, i ilike the random added in lines just to rhyme.

Thx man
Pitty you guys can't read dutch because I got much better ones in dutch and 'illusion' is way better in dutch, well whatever .

Does someone of you write poems or something like that ? I whould like to read them, doesn't really matter if they're good or terrible coz I'm interested in how people from other country's write.

Oh yeah As you can see im a better poet than anyone ever in the history of forever!!

of course you are !