hmm...first try? damn good in that case.
but as valug said, terran push is too easy...corner exps too easy to defend. but it's not a problem that's easily fixed. maybe make one corner island, and the current islands non-island and closer to choke for z? i'm not sure. Dahila of jungle had a nat that's pretty protected, so it's not like one is a bad thing. new idea, looks nice, and maybe we'll see more of your work soon
but i think you should make 1 corner exp island, the middle islands non island and closer to the choke, and maybe something with the sides, dunno. good first try man, WAY better than mine