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Facing memories from the past,
Ones that faded long ago.
The flowers have bloomed,
And then have died,
But my love for you
Will never go.

Spring is late--
Very late.
I've waited
And endured
The cursed winds of Gray.

An eternal Winter,
In my mentality.
The flowing warmth
Cannot be found...
Anywhere.

Freeze if I must.
Starve if I will.
But here I'll stand,
Waiting--
For you.


Yeah, maybe this isn't quite a poem, huh? Lol.

Here's another one I halfly finished during class.

Autumn

Dripping maple;
Soothing winds.
The sky will brew with intensity--
But not today.
For right now
It intoxicates
With drunkening aroumas
And vivid colors.

(this was as far as I got at school, the lower part I added on just now)

My heart flutters
In place of the absent butterflies.
I took a deep breath,
And drowned in Nature.
I gazed into the sky,
There a dove soared through.
"We'll meet again
next spring!"
Called the bird.
"Then I will see you soon,"
I replied,
"my love."


Ooookay o_O bring on the criticism!

I like how in the second poem you used an extended metaphor of nature that comes and go to portray an endless cycle of love.

Oh great.. I'm starting to sound like my english teacher now... -_-

rofl, perhaps you may become one I'm even considering it (but a foreigner teaching english?! lol).

I think that the second stanza of the second poem is the best part out of the bunch. Still, work on using a uniform tense throughout your work (unless you have a good reason to change it).

Yeah, that's actually a big problem for me, when things dont rhyme, they tend to be weird... i just write and cut the line where I want to emphasize something or have a pause at >_<

that's like putting a lot of books into one giant one, isn't it?

As a "writer" (and so I like to think), I feel that just about every poem deserves it's own thread... and also at the rate some of us write, it makes it difficult to find a certain poem, unless we all start agreeing on something like "hit ctrl+f, then type in #poemtitle" to find a particular one. And even at that, it's hard to find out if any new poems have been posted if ever a large amount of people post...

If you give me enough reasons to put it all into one, some advantages or such, then i'll eat my words and do as your suggestion.

you seem realy talented.

I dont know alot about writing, but i do like the sound of these

Thank you very much >_< /bow

I realized that I was actually "doodling", but with words when I was writing the first parts to that... weird, huh? doodling with words...

Eh? Not particularly. For example, I often just come up with phrases out of the blue.

Take this: There is a fellow who always speaks with a certain amount of wit. A large battle looms just on the horizon, and his friend suggests that they ride out to join their friends.

Mr. Witty: Are you nuts?
Friend (slapping him on the back): What, do you mean to tell me that you have none?
Mr. Witty (who is rarely at a loss for words, is at a loss for words, and his friend rides out with his sword drawn)

All of this was created in my mind in about the period of... oh let's say five seconds. I think a bit of motivation came from someone talking about nuts, or calling someone nuts, or something entirely random and unrelated such as that.

Then that leads me to creating more self-amused banter with a character who becomes more complex entirely due to this spur of imagination. For me, writing is a combination of random strokes of creativity, periods of time devoted to developing my story and characters, and the gritty work of writing and tying everything together. Now I know it's too late because the word "tying" looks funny to me.

Hehe, I see yeah, sometimes it's like a story comes to me, instead of me thinking of one... it's like someone just threw it in my head and i record it

And for every idea that I jot down there are a dozen more that I don't.

yeah, that's something I have to work on too -_-

What? I have too many ideas as is. Then again, there are never too many ideas floating around. There are just too many to write about.

Just realized that I had a typo..

"Skill" was suppose to be "Sky"