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[I shall be posting my songs, poems and stories here. Feel free to C&C on all of them.

Wickedly Yours, The Grim Reaper

Quit your delusions
(We were always)
Dont say it
(Nothing but enemys)
Its this kind of
(Fights with my)
Subconsious mind
(That inturrupt)
My life as it
(Finishes every sentence)
For me

Youd think id have retained atleast
A little bit of my so deserved
(Sanity)
But now all that inhabits my head
Is strict thoughts of the dead
And bottles apound bottles
With phone lines gone dead
And as i let this all slip away
From my grip i offer you
One last trip
(A promise to thrill)

I know that you know
(That i know)
That we know
(What i feels like)
To be ashamed of your love
And fighting back the wilful intention
Of throwing yourself in the mud
You see i have just begun

Schools letting out
(oh oh ohh)
And the bell is not tolling
Just for anything
(No no noo)
Its just after my little
Black coffin
(Dont say it)
And me.....

Please tell them
(To spare me)
Its not worth it
(To let this go)
Its just not worth
Losing sleep
(And sanity)
Over how much pity your willing to risk on this
(Graaaaaaa)

Quit your delusions
(We were always)
Dont say it
(Nothing but enemys)
Its this kind of
(Fights with my)
Subconsious mind
(That inturrupt)
My life as it
(Finishes every sentence)
For me


It Aint Far From Suicide To Homicide

Im in the kind of mood
Where i could just
Turn around at any given moment
And stab you

Its just the tingle
In my cheeks to put
This sadistic smile on my face
So keep an eye on the
News paper because
This small time massacare
Is going somewhere....

It aint far from a small towns
Massacre like suicide to a mass
Homicide
I ask you ignore the style
Which seems almost copied
On both accounts because you see
Two creative murders is a bit much
To ask of me

Such a curse wont die here
With me it just wont end
In such a way
Too many wills
Set on one goal will doom
Anything to failure
So i ask you to remember this
Even if its only for one lifetime

Ill only tell you once more
To shut the freak up because
Your last words dont mean crap to me
Ill only tell you once more
Not to move one freaking muscle
Because its not far from insanity
To a guilty plea

Ill talk back
And take back
Anything....

So let me drop
Off this cliff
(No not again)
It aint so hard
(What would you know)
To let go
(Dont understand me)
So tie this rope
And let me drop
Unto eternity....
(Eternity)


Idle Hands Leave Me Worthless

[Slightly spoken]
Ill be your muse
Ill be your round
In assassination use
Ill be anything that you
Want me to be
Im the clay on your desk
So sit and shape me

[Whisper]
Or just betray me....

You could make me beautiful
For fix a smile
On my face
You could make me a buisness man
With a nice suit
But no taste
Or you could make me something
To which i would be disgraced
You can shape me for i am
The clay

[Modified voice, half screamed]
Better open the door
The wolves are looking
To get in
Turn up the sound

[Same as above, police sirens in back round]
Excuse me if this
Seems a bit mean
But please step back
Because in case you
Didnt see
This is a freaking
Murder scene

Ill be the victim
Pefectly posed
In twisted tranquility
Ill be the killer
With a sadistic smile
And bad memories
Ill be the detective
With a face a nice
Shade of green
So shape me

You could make me homeless
Battered and dirty
Like some one hurt me
You could make me a fast food service man
In a tacky uniform
Robotic vocing "how may i help you"
Or you could make me something
To which i would be disgraced
You can shape me for i am
The clay

[Modified voice, half screamed]
Better open the door
The wolves are looking
To get in
Turn up the sound
Turn up the sound

[Same as above, police sirens in back round]
Excuse me if this
Seems a bit mean
But please step back
Because in case you
Didnt see
This is a freaking
Murder scene
This is a freaking
Murder scene

[Mid volume emotionally spoken]
My master piece
Is nothing but me
A block of clay
Waiting for you to shape me
So be ashamed
And disgraced as i
Silently reflect
Your minds personal
Taste

[Quietly fading in and out]
Excuse me if this
Seems a bit mean
But please step back
Because in case you
Didnt see
This is a freaking
Murder scene
This is
This is
My master pice
This is
This is
Turn up the sound
The wolves are looking
This is
This is
Just me
This is
a freaking
Murder scene



Life Lessons: How To Sharpen A Blade

Spent last night
All alone
But staying up late
To review your
Meticulose files of my
Mistakes
Turn on me
And it falls on you
This assault
On a reopened wound

Look at the empty
Bottle and love letters
Torn into pieces along
With the hate mail
When i commented on
Your worse situations
Come no let this go
Or maybe your dagger
Like words will wind up
Stabbing a few backs
And slitting a few throats

Forget remorse
From here on in
I just dont care
Maybe you know
That my ideas are
Being put alive
Some where
But if you knew
Then why keep such
Dilusional secrets from me

And then i bring news
Of my premiere
On a stage tonight
To bring such fright
With the story of my life....



A Crime Scene And A Belated Invitation

You can leave me to weep
In this darkened street
Because we both know
That i dont need
To sleep

You can take away every
Last dime that i have
Because we both know
I dont need the money

It was never about this game
Nor was it about the fame
I dont want the credit or your excuses
So save it

It wasnt the blood on the floor
Nor my reflection in it that
Changed my mind
It was the simple things
Like the way you
Looked at me

It wouldnt be so hard
If you would just admit
To what you did
Sirens flash
Boys in blue
Drop the knife sir
And step away
From the body

Shots fired
But no man down
Standing there
Bleeding out
Sadistic smile
Time running out

Stop the clock
Its all suspended
And frozen
The ever turning earth
Rests

And then as it slowly resumes....

You can leave me to weep
In this darkened street
Because we both know
That i dont need
To sleep

You can take away every
Last dime that i have
Because we both know
I dont need the money

It was never about this game
Nor was it about the fame
I dont want the credit or your excuses
So save it
So save it


The Leprechaun's Lucky Vest

Tell ya what
Itll be a meracle
If i dont kill some body
Before this day is out

Show you the worst
Show you the best
Be pure luck if this
Bullet doesnt go right
Through your chest
That is if luck it a
Bullet proof vest

I am a box in
A storage closet
Hiding the theif
I am the faulty
Safety system
Causing your family
Such greif
But you cant blame
This all on me
Or maybe you can

Tell ya what
Itll be a meracle
If i dont kill some body
Before this day is out
And if your lucky
I hope your vest is
Strappted tight
Or atleast it should be
For the rest of your life

Bet you cant stop
Cant stop
A sniper
Bet you cant stop
Cant stop
A two twenty three
Solid is silver round
Out of an old springfield
Trigger pulled by yours truely....



You could’ve been colder if you tried

Sat down just to review
Just what I think of you
Cant say much for it
Because you
Couldve been colder
If you tried

Instead of crashing my hope
Hanging on its thin rope
With a simple rejection
You could’ve played me
Without revealing your intention

I cant remember if I would’ve
Prefered to die
When I heard you
Had such hate inside
But I made up my mind
That there was no way
To turn such a tide

You could’ve done worse
Through my constant
And unfaltering dedication
Of rethinking this matter
That’s whats come of this
Matter of being the worse
That you could be
Course its nothing new to me

You’ve demonstrated it
All too clear and clean
So why do you keep
Trying to surprise me

Because its been agreed
You could’ve been colder
If you tried




Blown Away

When i looked about
You were always there
Like a cold breeze
Coliding with a warm
Southern air

I felt so good because
It seemed that you were
Always there
Now your gone and i
Have a new perspective
As i stare
Out this window and
Ask oh where oh where
Oh Where

But i got the message
Before you left it on
My machine
Sorry if my responses
To you these days seem
Empty hollowed
And far too short for
Questions in convorsations
That last
Far too long but thats how
It goes when i dont have
You to look to

I felt so good because
It seemed that you were
Always there
Now your gone and i
Have a new perspective
As i stare
Out this window and
Ask oh where oh where
Oh Where

Maybe this was all
An accident of our
Own pride
And maybe just a bit
Of misplaced pitty so
Why not
Let this go and let a
Start fresh out and new
Please let
This praposel go through
With your so hard to gain
Approval of me

I felt so good because
It seemed that you were
Always there
Now your gone and i
Have a new perspective
As i stare
Out this window and
Ask oh where oh where
Oh Where

When i looked about
You were always there
Like a cold breeze
Coliding with a warm
Southern air
But now i realize
Im from the north
And your blowing south
Like a crumpled piece
Of paper in the wind
I cant stop the wind
Lest i stop your world
So ill have to let you go
For now....



War Transcriptions

On a not so clear
Battle ground
I stand alone
Its a warm night
Considering its
Only december

But when the earth
Decides to slide away
And relinques my
Comrads bones and spears
Then all will hear
Of a war story told
For generations

To unearth these bones would
Be a crime that only mother nature
Would dare to commit
To retell this story may be treason
But were all traitors in one way or another
Just look around at eachother
As i said to the captain
That these farmers were not the soldiers
That we need
He said theyre the best to have for they have seen
The enemy burn down their homes so
Why not let them prove their valor
I respond captain captain ive known you
Far too long
What is your exact motive?

He smiled his oh so sure
Captains grin
Not a smile but a matter of
Contimplation
I could see in his eyes there was
A matter sturring inside

So after that little pause
He tells me in his response
Ever so quietly
Because i plan to lose this battle
With no retreat
Now havent you known me long enough
I will accept no defeat
Down to the last man
Theyll fall at eachothers feet
And that is exactly

What happened here today
Save one small error
For i stand here
Battered and bruised
Alone and confused
To retell this tale
So with this war transcript
Coming to a close i sign
My name
And leave this tear in history maimed

Sincerely
Lt. Aldabrand Xcarus
Mobile Demon Infantry
Santans Army
2nd division

Stained Glass Window Oh Friend Of Mine

The truth is
Oh my friend the truth is.....

The truth is....
That i dont know what to say or what to make
Of this little piece of tourcher that you call
Reality
Truth being what i see and what it means to me
Not what you would presume to be true because
That decision wasnt left to you nor was it to me
But you see i believe that i see things more clearly
And its only because of what i have to loose and
What i hold so dearly which gives me my clarity

The smugges on this glass window
Make it so hard to see through
Not that id want to look back at you
This mirror is too dusty to take
A look through
I cant see myself in it anymore
It seems like the darkest road
Is all i have to choose
Choose wisely my friend
And may it all
Soon come to an end

The pace is fine and ill just count down the time
Nothings fine atleast not with me and you cant
See just how i bleed for what youve done to me
Dont run its gonna get a little too fast trust me
Your not gonna last and right now it isnt about me
It was always about you and i cant deal with this
Or see through to some other side the light cannot shine
The truth is what i see and what such things mean to me
No its not about you not anymore im taking control
You cant brake my tainted window
Its my never ending focus
You cant brake my tainted window
Itll make your grave and break you
Too....


Vertical Complex

To make a change of scenery
To make it all new to me
To have a feeling so beautifuly
It all makes sense
But that aint gonna pay the rent
Philosophy
Not buisness but a hobby
But id give anything to do what i love
To feed both the pocket and the soul
And make a new mold
To upgrade the standards
Make the number and percentage go down
On the demanders

To kill what hunts me
To solve what puzzles me
To make plain what was complex
Seems like im standing in an empty complex
A scene with all most everything the same
Use the words in a comination sticks and stone
Add in some tactics a military genius
Let them observe from the high ground and
Make their plans to control man
But in the end its instinct
Not what they think
Thatll win the war

To make what was uncreated
To redo that which was broken
To take the shot to make it all stop
I have a shell of outter cold
Never to let inside what was
Created inside that mold because
Im getting so old and so cold
From what we would call
Needing a stamp of approval on this
Show some back bone
Never take it for granted
And skill hone
Inclose on my talents
The new masters of
Unmesurable talents
Shifting the balance
Twoards those of us
With a counsious of
Malice.....


True Philosophys

Dark blazes
Of black infernos
So eternal
What about the
People just starting to
Wake up in a world
And keep their eyes shut
So maybe when they open
Itll seem blurry and not see
The pain and bullet flurry
And not see what i see
Cuz we all know what i see
{Yea man}

What i see
Is mans glory years are over
What i see
Is every country nukelear freaking
Themselves over
What i see
Is an unatural winter
When its all over
And the world will change again
And bring out a new dominating race again
What i see
Is far worse then what i speak
What i see
Is my philosophys
Going to waste
And being uncovered
Some years later
Copied and paste
By some useless school
Punk with no taste
{Talk about sin}
But what i really see
Is what trying to be human does to me
Take a look at your self in the mirror
Try to envision the scars are gone
Even the ones on the inside from prision
And forget that some have everything as a given
Forget how badly your living
{Dont ask the dead to breath}
And look to what you are
Im talking about inside
Inside
Where our emotions thrive
A subconsious hive
Of energy waiting to be released
By you and me and every one else
Whos too afraid to speak out against
The cards that theyve been delt
Like thats gonna help
{So true}
These are my philosophys
Dont double cross me
You know what the truth is to me
{Its everthing}
Its more then what i missed
More then what i feel when i kiss
More then a blood red rose
Sealed with a hit and miss
To make it all fade away
{Make it all go away}

End Of The World

Its all
Plaugerism
And Racism
Adding to the fact that
I can deal with them
Make people see
The manner of what
Is the true matters
And be
Ever changed
With eyes shut
Keep em tight
Lest we look in the world again
And wake up our emotions again

Guess i gotta come to terms
With it again
Forget to let go of what i said i forgot
Again
To take the chain back
To make the world change back
And delete
This politics
And communists
Deciding what is right
For the many when
They have no idea
Of what to do wiht themselves
Why you think theyre im politics
Its just a seat to sell
But a chance to sell out
And then sit back and look back
On the mess you created
Now what im saying may soon be out dated
But to hell with those who wont hear it
Just because im the one that made it
A change and i made it
Just let it all end

Untouchable Marble

I am
The reason for hate
I am
The individual
The more then just visual
The spiritual and reckless
A spirit that vexes
My name is lust
And im the reason you hate
Id leave a hell inferno
In my wake
And to me its all a piece of cake
To make or break
And make you all
Shake

I am
The unequal
I am
The sequal
The after prequal
The masters keyful
But the master of
The unequal
Discriminations fury
Never trust your fate
On the jury
The justice of one
Made by the many
The fools justice
You cant pull that
On me

I am
The one whos done
Before its begun
The gone whos not afraid
To pick up the gun
I am the word
The writter refused
The poem with no copyright
Stolen and reused
But to be recognized is refused
God forbid i can use
My true talent
Get a grip on my words
And break loose
Some say i may
Have a screw or two loose

I am
The block
Of marble in the studio
Mirrored surfaced
Tools cant breach me
I work for this
This shine that is mine
The outter shell
Maybe never to be broken
To see my arcitecture
With true eyes open
I feel like im blowing
A whole new truth open
And maybe im still scopin
For my place

I am
The words
That make up the motto
I am
The bullets from the gun salvos
The ever traveling desert camal
In camo
My weapon
A cloak of shadows
Pride is my reason to battle
So forgive me if
I agree that to disagree
Would be in my best intrest
Im ruthless
I already knew this
So lets do this
If only not to say
That I knew this
To also state
That i been through this

I am
The never ending battle
I am
The cavalrys ammo
On horseback
To push back
Any advance
On my plans
Its all been written in stone
Ive broken the mold
And grown oh so cold

I am the marble in the studio
But youll never hear me though
A solution to be found is critical
And it all becomes lyrical
Bullet speed and sphyreical
This outter shell shall never
Be broken

Empty Emotions

Dont make me say that
(You know its)
Not that way
Im just not used to
(Saying things)
So openly
(This way)

Dont make this
A simple repeat
Of a past
(Mistake)
It wasnt supposed
To wind up
(In such a)
Twisted game
I couldnt help but notice
(As you ignored my stare)
That no matter how much
I care that theres nothing really
(There)

Ok
Im fine now
Ive regained my composer
You made me admit
Made me regret
Made me look back
So did you accomplish
Your goal
To make my voice a whisper
So quiet that no one
Will ever know

Dont make this
(A simple repeat)
Of a past
(Mistake my my mistake)
Im fine but it it
It wasnt supposed
(To wind up)
In such a
(Twisted game)
I couldnt help but notice
(As you ignored my stare)
That no matter how much
(I care about you and would die for you)
That theres nothing really
There.....



Have You Ever...
My dear you seem so
Unimpressed and still
So indifferent why dont you
Let me show you my
More uncommon sense
Of a good time

Tell me have you ever
Kissed a blade
To create the most
Desireable experiance
Youve ever played
Like a game
But with its little too much
Consiquences im sure

Can you tell me
Why your so bored
Is life so bland
From your perspective
Is this modern scene
A little too much
In such a state of mind
No occupation just
Wasting away for
Waiting on the weekend
Scene....

Have you ever
Made a room
Fill with negativity
From a simple taste
Of what you would call
Self explanitory

Has some one tried
To crash down your
Self esteem and misguided
Attempts on an expression
Of self
Or does it just not fit
With these empty
Conversations while you alone
In the courner of your room
Dont ask how
Dont ask why
I know and or care
Its no longer controversial
Or a matter of opinion

Tell me have
You ever
Known a single
Though of
Individuality
Is it so hard
Is life so bland
Come on yea
Dont let my little
Bit of an excited
Expression put more
Of a damper on your
Spirit that is if you
Have one....


Im Afraid Of The Dark

Demons in my head
Skeleton in my closet
We both know
Im the only one
That can take care of it

Shadows creeping
Memories haunting
And I know
Ill have to face it

Im afraid of the dark
Ill admit my pain
But show me love
Im afraid of the dark
Ill deal with the pain
But dont let the cuts
Go deeper

A moments hesitation
Is all it takes
To hint away
At what makes me break
A moments questions
Push back on me
And I resist this
Difficulty

Pain so deeply
Embedded in me
Despair entwined in
My soul and
Hope so forgotten
I been thinking alot and
Its time for me
To let my memories go
Let the memories go
Let the pain go
Right out the window

A single crimson tear
May escape my eye
But the pain it bears
Takes a little away from
The mass held inside

A single crimson tear
For the years
I spent with you

You Think Its Easy Being Dead?

Well well well

Which is it
Im not going to sit here
Through the storm as you
Ponder it
I swear you better make
Your decision soon
Though id have to agree
Theres no reason
To throw anymore uneeded
Salt on this wound

Broken and empty bottles
Reminds me of emotional
Fragments and pieces
And reasons why i hate
Such situations
Of large groups and
Family get togethers
Maybe thats why
Lieing through your teeth
Just has no effect on me

Trust me
I didnt mean to make
It this easy to be humilated
On a grand scale
Its just part of
Unknown situation of
Sophistication and how well you
Can handle a razor
It seems so simple for now
But give it some time
And ill say something
Thatll really raise your brow

Dont call it remorse
For if you do ill just
Have to pretend i dont care
Its not like some simple
Plan without a care
Theres too much at stake
Too little too late
You know what i mean
Oh no you dont

Its not that easy
No no i wouldnt
Make it so easy
Dont tell me you know
Because i know
That i didnt make myself
So freaking easy
To understand

So blow out the candle
As they blast my seemingly
Odd death march down the street
And throw dead roses
At the street
Oh no
Its not that easy
No not so easy
To die


Explaning Why The Dead Breath
It was a street courner
And so late at night
As i drop
My crumpled piece of paper
I know your right
I know your right

Seems like when ever
I feel the need to lie
A pain comes to my eyes
And all the lights come alive
And maybe being together
Would suggest that we were
More close then we are
Maybe it would suggest
Too much

I want to explain this
To you so badly
But i cant think of anything
To say
I wish i could explain baby
In a less complicated way

You seem to know
My every move
Every twitch of my eye
Remind me who side
You stand by
Because its beggining
To look like your a little
Too far from me
A little too far

I want to explain this
To you so badly
But i cant think of anything
To say
I wish i could explain baby
In a less complicated way
I want to explain this
To you so badly
But i cant think of anything
To say
I wish i could explain baby
In a less complicated way


Being Rid Of An Old Ghost
You better you better
Just be sure
Better better
Make it better
But be sure

Cant explain how
I wound up tied up
In this rope
Seems like my heads
Filled up with smoke
But with an attractive
And provacative
Attitude you
Make me get
You make me get
Too close
Too close

I just want
To be rid of you
So badly
I dont even care which way
I just want
To be rid of you
So badly
Dont care if it
Kills me

Despite immoral
Concepts you choose
To defy
Every thing i am
Cuz you are
Always what i want
But with such an
Attractive attitude
You seem to make me get
Too close
Too close

I just want
To be rid of you
So badly
I dont even care which way
I just want
To be rid of you
So badly
Dont care if it

Ill make sure
That your dead
And laid to rest
Utterly and finally
Just so sure
To make you be
Undone finally.....

Now Thats What I Call Memories
Through this bottle
Ill write a song
Itll leave you on the edge
Of your seat
It will overcome
Amazing feats
And claim me awards

Its aint for the fame
Id rather have the scar
Then the story
Kind of like the run around personality
That you have

Your smile reminds me
Of the fourth of july
Not like that one time though
Were we went north
Just to see it snow
And as the fire rose
Into the night
I felt that i now had some right
To tell you
But i didnt

I cant bring myself
To even put my arm around you
When your like this
And i know given the chance
I wouldnt dare give you a kiss
Its just too much and i dont care to miss
Your sad times
Because our best times
Were all the doing
Of you

Ill keep on it
And ask you
Where have you been
But i guess im just
Dust in the wind
And im not about
To let you win

Through this bottle
Ill write a song
Itll leave you on the edge
Of your seat
It will overcome
Amazing feats
And claim me awards
Seems the last time
I ever felt proud
Was the only time i
Stood out from the crowd
And stood up for you
For you

Ill end this here and now
And as you lay down
To let this die
No i wont lie
As you let down and
Let this die

Your smile
It reminds me of
The fourth of july
Sunny and sparkling
With explosions
On the mind

7 Fingers To A Trigger
You want an apology
Then i suggest you write
Your will because
If thats what you want
Its what youll get
But not before i make you
Hold your breath
Forever

What you will get
Is just what i want
I hope the taste of blood
Will stay sweet
Forever

Ill make this clear
Ive never done
Anything
But point the gun
At myself
Point this
At myself

Take that back
I know you didnt mean it
Take it back
Cuz i mean it
Take that back
I know you didnt mean it
Take it back
Cuz im so conceded

Ive never done anything
No not anything
To hurt you
(Take my pride
And this gun)
Cuz im just
In too fragile
Of a position
(Dont make me
Say it again)

Ive never done anything
But point this gun
At myself


Regrets Of A Pulled Trigger
This is me
Finger on the trigger
Ready to deliver
So come on come on
Lets go

Critacism?
To put it lightly
This is a failed attempt
At art if you could call that
Afterall its teenage poetry
Too many similies
Ranging from simple to complex
Yea i know you cant help it
If you call this work
I think your busted

Im literate and i deliver
In a way i find stylish
And i think you should
Shut your mouth
Cuz this is what my
Dreams are made of
Even if theyre made up
Come on you just
Dont make sense now
Let me be

This is me
Finger on the trigger
Ready to deliver
No apologizes
Left in me
Remind me why
I ever liked you

This is me
Finger on the trigger
Ready to deliver
No apologizes
Left in me
Thats you with
A girl to have
On your arm
This is me alone
A literary swarm

This is me
Finger on the trigger
Ready to deliver
No apologes
Left in me
Cuz theyre never were
No apologes
Never were any
In me


My EveryThing In One
She sat down today
knowing it was just to get up again
i could see the vauge emptiness
in her stare
the fallen angels tear
a hear broken by
the one she called
Love
the one she called
Home
the one she told
"baby your my life my love my salvation
my everything in one"

I saw her again
sittin alone
on a park bench
her blue eyes glistened
with pain against the falling snow
oh i thought to myself
what a poor girl
seemed like yesterday
she was in ribbons and curls
and i watched
like one that wasnt there
saying to myself
i can feel the burdining pain you bear
her heart broken
by the one
that she called
Love
by the one
she called
Home
By the one she told
"Baby dont leave my your my everything in one"

I was on the subway
and she was there
and i asked "my god
why did you give her this pain to bear
why did you make it like this
was it all for your enjoyment
of a life torn up by this"
He gave no response
but from the heavens
i think he stared
and thought to himself
"look at him over there
he knows her pain
and he knows the solution he wont share"
as i watched her a single silver tear
fell from her eye
and that stare or plae blue
made me fell like i could die
her heart broken
by the one
she called
Love
the one
she called
Home
the one
she called
"you dead beat illegitimate child get out now"
as she pointed the gun

I know i can help her
this i swear
but i am willing
to reaccept
that burden to share
finally i understood
her sad stare
she knew i could save her
and those eyes
begged me to dare
to risk my self
if only this once
to become
Her
Love
Her
Home
Her
Salvation
Her
Everything in one






Updated on 5/23/06

More to come.


-Legacy

Dang, that are quite some songs you got there, 127... . Did you also recorded the songs, and if yes is there any way I could hear some of them?

I've quickly read some of them and there are interesting parts. However I got no idea which are writen as poems and which are writen as lyrics. Could you tell me which is what? I can't/won't comment (not in depth at least) songs since in my opinion the music is usually more important, but I'm really interested in any poems you've written.

EDIT: On a side note, please, PLEASE don't post all 127 of them! Or at least make an index or something like that. With that much text it will be impossible to scroll and read anything. Instead why won't you post the best ones? (if you aren't already doing that, of course )

Those songs were pretty impressive. If you post any more I will definitely read them. Nice Work!

The Leprechaun's Lucky Vest: 4.5/5.0 Score

Yup. I think the end is hilarious.

Leg, some of the stuff makes me laugh, some of it reminds me of how I feel half the time. It seems like a lot of it is just to help you let out some built up hatred, which is fine, but things like that could usually be really really good if they're refined. (At least, that's what people tell me about my work that was like that.)

A lot of it reminds me of some of my stuff, and I think "Idle Hands Leave Me Worthless" is my favorite so far, or "It Aint Far From Suicide To Homicide".

All are pretty nicely done. And this post reminds me, (the reviews in the game forum does too) that I think that we should be able to put sub-topics within topics.

Like, make a topic "legacy's work" and then have topics inside of it which are each poem/story/song, not just have to make one huge ass post. Or a topic like ____'s reviews, and not one big ass thing you need to scroll, but like various things inside of the one post.

A. Nope, i wish i could record them but i have no band and although i can sing im not all that good...

B. Sometimes i dont know myself. My words flow right out of me and i have no idea what they want to say. But the first 2 are definately songs.



Thanks so much! ^.^




I want to do that but with snab backs to each section. I dont know how id do this though i saw it in a map production topic.

Anyone know how?

Id like to thank everyone for my main reason i was hesitant to post on SEN was the thought that no one would care to read my work. I have happily been proven wrong.

-Legacy



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-Legacy

That marble one is incredible.

I am the bullet in the gun salvos...great line. motto doesn't seem to rhyme perfectly but no matter, the rest of it makes it awesome. The end, reenforcing the outer shell image is nice.

Vertical complex is pretty ill too. Congrats, and keep it comin'. I just still think the scrolling factor will be very....very annoying.

I know but there isnt anything i can really do about it. v.v

But thanks for all the comments dude.

-Legacy

You know, to be honest I think you would be a good rap-writer .

I HATE RAP

But its a compliment.....sort of....so thanks....

-Legacy

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Updated on 5/10/06.

-Legacy

A great composer once said: "It is very easy to compose beutiful music, you just need to remoove the unneeded notes".

I see this in allmost all the SEN poems & other literature - it's filled with unneeded "notes"- words. Maybe to rime, maybe for logics, maybe for looking cooler...

No offence, but I didn't like it.

^ Nice line


Lega, it's kinda strange...your poems express the same way I felt like....a couple months ago.

;P

Especially the last one. "I'm afraid of the dark", or something like that? (don't wanna press "back" for the title)

the descriptions are so perfect...one crimson tear...

But I sometimes wonder where you get your inspiriation

And "Have you ever" is also pretty true as well. Half the assclowns I see all day just listen to pop on their ipod, buy the next converse shoe that comes out, go hang out at hot topic at the mall, and think they'll fail a math test.

I wonder how many of them are actually human ;P

You one line sums it up quite nicely:

Some were really great, some not so great, some I didn't really feel for.

I "hate" rap too, but for the sake of hip-hop and open-mindedness, I put up with it.

You can always record the song singing in a capela.


See? This is the problem with the POST EVERY PIECE ON ONE SINGLE POST. It's long as hell, tedious to find, and well, people get sick of just seeing so much text. Unless HTML targetting or any other form of targetting is allowed, it just wouldn't work all that well.

For example, you could have the title

Dream Fountain - May 16, 2006 (NEW)

then have it target-linked to the piece.

Otherwise, it's just a pain in the ass for the reader to read, and the author to edit.

These are inspirational to read. Thats all I can really say about it.

Thanks wooden. Atleast your not simon about one thing.

Updated 5/18/06

-DB

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-DB