Report, edit, etc...Posted by dumbducky on 2006-05-20 at 17:19:17
I wrote this poem for school. It's pretty gay and retarded. Enjoy!
Tim and the Magical Pony
Tim was a little boy
Who didn’t play with a toy
He would rather explore Magicaland
He knew it like the back of his hand
One day when Tim was wandering
He discovered a wonderful thing
He discovered a pink pony
Who he named Tony
One day while riding
He discovered another thing
Tony had a magical ability
He could teleport anywhere but the sea
One day Tim woke with a fright
Try and try as he might
Tim could not find his pony
Tim could not find Tony
He searched the old caves
He looked behind the graves
He hunted through the forest
He even checked the florist!
Then he ran up the tall hill
The tall one with the mill
And then he saw Tony
Tony, his beloved pony
Jim saw Tony wasn’t alone
And he let out a large groan
Tony had been captured by barbarians
And they were not vegetarians
They chopped Tony’s legs off
And threw them in a trough
They ate those legs to the bone
And Tim let out another groan
They finally left dead Tony
Probably in search of bologna
Tim took the rest of the day to cry
And then he said goodbye
He grabbed his sword and charged
And into the barbarian party he barged
And he fought and fought
He fought the entire lot
He struck his enemies many times
Until they paid for their crimes
He never once winced
And Tim had his Vengeance
Yah, I had writer's block when coming up with the original idea.
Tim and the Magical Pony
Tim was a little boy
Who didn’t play with a toy
He would rather explore Magicaland
He knew it like the back of his hand
One day when Tim was wandering
He discovered a wonderful thing
He discovered a pink pony
Who he named Tony
One day while riding
He discovered another thing
Tony had a magical ability
He could teleport anywhere but the sea
One day Tim woke with a fright
Try and try as he might
Tim could not find his pony
Tim could not find Tony
He searched the old caves
He looked behind the graves
He hunted through the forest
He even checked the florist!
Then he ran up the tall hill
The tall one with the mill
And then he saw Tony
Tony, his beloved pony
Jim saw Tony wasn’t alone
And he let out a large groan
Tony had been captured by barbarians
And they were not vegetarians
They chopped Tony’s legs off
And threw them in a trough
They ate those legs to the bone
And Tim let out another groan
They finally left dead Tony
Probably in search of bologna
Tim took the rest of the day to cry
And then he said goodbye
He grabbed his sword and charged
And into the barbarian party he barged
And he fought and fought
He fought the entire lot
He struck his enemies many times
Until they paid for their crimes
He never once winced
And Tim had his Vengeance
Yah, I had writer's block when coming up with the original idea.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Falcon_A on 2006-05-22 at 21:42:16
QUOTE
It's pretty gay and retarded.
lol, j/k.
All things considered...and the whole setting...
I didn't see the violence coming. Poor Tim, man...he was just a kid who wanted to play with his pony, but he was forced to become full of hate just for vengeance and to defend what he believes was right...and poor Tony, he was such a martyr, and damn it made me cry.
Well, no, but it was sorta good. Really. For a school thing? I know you probably sat there for like 20 minutes and then was like "aah, fark it" and then you were just like DAAAH THE MAJIC PONY LOLOLOLL, but it came out good!
Report, edit, etc...Posted by dumbducky on 2006-05-24 at 20:18:19
Really?
It actually took about an hour, but only because I write slow.
Your right, the violence was pretty random. Oh well, I got a 100 on it.
It actually took about an hour, but only because I write slow.
Your right, the violence was pretty random. Oh well, I got a 100 on it.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by Rabid_Wolf_101 on 2006-05-25 at 12:22:48
Well this certainly doesn't have a long climax... 
All in all i agree with falcon... sorta... I just cant imagine an older teenager writing something like that 
All in all i agree with falcon... sorta... I just cant imagine an older teenager writing something like that Report, edit, etc...Posted by A_of_s_t on 2006-05-25 at 13:42:56
I thought this was going to be a kids peom, then the barbarians came in and ate the pony. I was like," FTW?"
Its good, but random. Ill have to tell this to my girlfriend.
Its good, but random. Ill have to tell this to my girlfriend.
Report, edit, etc...Posted by dumbducky on 2006-05-26 at 16:54:52
QUOTE(Rabid_Wolf_101 @ May 25 2006, 12:22 PM)
Well this certainly doesn't have a long climax... All in all i agree with falcon... sorta... I just cant imagine an older teenager writing something like that
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I'm 13. Do you consider 13 and older teenager?
Report, edit, etc...Posted by SunMoon_Emperor on 2006-05-26 at 17:40:37
I can relate. I wander a magicland, called Pharth, whenever I'm stressed out. Yes I know it's not real. IM NOT CRAZ-E! 