any constructive critisism would be usefull
(any at all)
can you at least tell us the story line and what the map is all about first?
if this is finished then it shouldnt be in this forum.
Unless you purposely want to make a crappy map, name it something better. While this title (hopefully) tells you exactly how to play, it sounds extremely boring.
He may be going for the SOAP (Snakes on a Plane) effect in which he uses a terribly simplistic name to hide something amazing.
If not, this map looks horrible and its int he wrong place. If its done, its not in production.